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You’re my happiness 19-9-09
The moon, with the stars, has just danced merrily.
In the sky, for me, in the soft night.
The trees have swayed, the birds have sung happily.
The chance has smiled; I've loved at the first sight
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I'd loved you before even I saw you.
Our souls met, in that old, eternal world.
My heart beats with your name, and it'll still do.
If you expel me, in hell, I'll be hurled.
------------------------------------ (2)
I can see just you, and hear just your voice.
I say your name, in my waking and sleep.
My friends blamed me, but I have no choice.
Your love is my fate, carved in my far deep.
------------------------------------- (3)
You sent your aid Cupid, hold his arrow.
He darted my heart, let me bedridden.
Couldn't he convey me to you? Break his bow?
I need you, to remove my wound, my sin.
-------------------------------------- (4)
Take me in your arms, and cravingly tug!
Bring me closer to you, kiss me on lips!
Don’t leave me a second, please tightly hug!
Let me live sweet love, with your lovely nips!
--------------------------------------- (5)

I'm so proud to become the first who comments at your poeme , Really i have lived and felt with each word that you wrote, addition to your aesthetic technical writting that makes me read this poeme merrily......
I noticed that you focus on natural expession of topic in the first of poeme, therefore you moved to use body and senses to describe your feeling into this sujet, then you keen on sharing anonym so as to give this poeme thriller, and in the last you deemed that destiny and fate that judged on you this love and so on .....
Really you are talented poet, i'm waitting for new poemes and creations.
Accepte my greeting.

very nice, I like it.

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sorry for being late this time

i see that u start moving sad tone and this good to me

Mohyiedine wrote:I'm so proud to become the first who comments at your poeme , Really i have lived and felt with each word that you wrote, addition to your aesthetic technical writting that makes me read this poeme merrily......
I noticed that you focus on natural expession of topic in the first of poeme, therefore you moved to use body and senses to describe your feeling into this sujet, then you keen on sharing anonym so as to give this poeme thriller, and in the last you deemed that destiny and fate that judged on you this love and so on .....
Really you are talented poet, i'm waitting for new poemes and creations.
Accepte my greeting.

hello my friend
congratulations
i think ur words are more beautiful than my poem itself and i feel happiness koz u praise my poem.....
thnx thnx thnx
ur words really encouraged me
c u and gdlk

shakespear wrote:You’re my happiness 19-9-09
The moon, with the stars, has just danced merrily.
In the sky, for me, in the soft night.
The trees have swayed, the birds have sung happily.
The chance has smiled; I've loved at the first sight
------------------------------------ (1)
I'd loved you before even I saw you.
Our souls met, in that old, eternal world.
My heart beats with your name, and it'll still do.
If you expel me, in hell, I'll be hurled.
------------------------------------ (2)
I can see just you, and hear just your voice.
I say your name, in my waking and sleep.
My friends blamed me, but I have no choice.
Your love is my fate, carved in my far deep.
------------------------------------- (3)
You sent your aid Cupid, hold his arrow.
He darted my heart, let me bedridden.
Couldn't he convey me to you? Break his bow?
I need you, to remove my wound, my sin.
-------------------------------------- (4)
Take me in your arms, and cravingly tug!
Bring me closer to you, kiss me on lips!
Don’t leave me a second, please tightly hug!
Let me live sweet love, with your lovely nips!
--------------------------------------- (5)

old poem...2009